How much detail to include? A challenge for fetish writers

Posted in commentary on Monday, 23rd May 2022

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Those of us who write fetish fiction can find the urge to linger. We want to describe in excruciating detail how the latex crackles just so, or how each crack of the whip feels like this.

For a first draft, as we get carried away with our fantasy, this isn’t a problem. After all, the whole point of the draft is to tell ourselves the story. It’s there to get the ideas out of our head and onto the screen. But leave these multi-thousand word descriptions in your prose and things will get repetitive rather quickly.

My approach, for what it’s worth, is to trust the reader. I try to avoid huge, detailed descriptions of costumes and people so the reader can fill in the blanks. They can layer their own fantasies onto the characters and scenes, and my prose then nudges them in the right direction.

This doesn’t mean the first versions of my writings aren’t full of painfully convoluted and sometimes inconsistent text. It’s my job as I edit to resolve these inconsistencies and give the reader something to play with. 

There are no absolutes in this process. There is no point where I can say “this is now perfect”. Ultimately it’s for the reader to decide whether what I’ve written is enjoyable.

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